I Overshot You (demo)
I believe in energy and mass and light and gravity
I believe in engines you can calibrate with instruments
I believe that we should have found a way to unite
A way to harness large forces to our tiny desires
I overshot you
I overshot you
I'm out of your orbit
I'm not better for it
I overshot you
I believe in politics (just enough so I don't get sick)
I believe in the better world despite what I been told
I believe everything possible will come to be in time
A day will return when I am yours and you are mine
I overshot you
I overshot you
I'm out of your orbit
I'm not better for it
I overshot you
This home I inhabit is just an unlikely hovel
Instead of my long-hoped-for science fiction novel
I believe in afterlife (others' memories no pearly gates)
I believe nighttime prayer cuts my long-distance rates
I believe that we should have found a way to unite
A day will return when I am yours and you are mine
I overshot you
I overshot you
I'm out of your orbit
I'm not better for it
I overshot you
I believe in engines you can calibrate with instruments
I believe that we should have found a way to unite
A way to harness large forces to our tiny desires
I overshot you
I overshot you
I'm out of your orbit
I'm not better for it
I overshot you
I believe in politics (just enough so I don't get sick)
I believe in the better world despite what I been told
I believe everything possible will come to be in time
A day will return when I am yours and you are mine
I overshot you
I overshot you
I'm out of your orbit
I'm not better for it
I overshot you
This home I inhabit is just an unlikely hovel
Instead of my long-hoped-for science fiction novel
I believe in afterlife (others' memories no pearly gates)
I believe nighttime prayer cuts my long-distance rates
I believe that we should have found a way to unite
A day will return when I am yours and you are mine
I overshot you
I overshot you
I'm out of your orbit
I'm not better for it
I overshot you
Comments
The hook lingers.
Your composition?
It takes a little while before I can hear the song and not what I wish I'd done with it. I wrote the words a few months ago, forgot about them until I came back across them during a hard-drive restore last week, and figured I'd try them with a few chords I liked the sound of on my guitar, on which I'd dropped the high-E string to D and capoed four frets. I'd've sung louder, but the second verse actually brought A. running from the other side of the apartment to tell me to quiet down (since it was pretty late by then). Maybe I'll lower the synthesized strings, bring up the "whirly" fake-Wurlitzer organ setting, and try a little more knob-toggling with the synthesized bass so it plops/lumbers less. What would you change? You say it sounds laid-back, which is true. I'd thought about speeding it up from 110 bpm to around 140 or 150 bpm, believe it or not. :-)
I've got a few more up at MeFi Music. (I like "Second Ring," which also got assembled in GarageBand, and "South of the Border" which was me sitting in my kitchen alone on a Sunday afternoon.)